RAP: Surprised by Words

by l. l. barkat on May 1, 2009

lilac half open

L.L. here for Random Acts of Poetry. Considering how we grow in our writing. Is it by being “held accountable” through a process of “critique”? Do we grow when someone says, “That’s awful”?

I can’t tell you how many people have contacted me behind the scenes to say, “I used to write poetry, but then…” But then, this teacher. Or that naysayer. This hurtful comment. That note of rejection. And so on.

In the world of poetry, where too few venues receive too many submissions and where a sense of “the experts” reigns, I wonder if we’ve eclipsed the opportunity for growth and celebration. I’m not saying there shouldn’t be something to reach for, standards of excellence, hard work, places we can count on for culling a good poem when we hunger for one. But I suspect that the poetry community has too long cultivated elitism, to its diminishment.

Of what? The chance for people to be, as John Fox says, surprised by their “own words or of being surprised by the poems of others,” which is “at the heart of poetry as healer.” Fox goes on to say that “surprise is a kind of revelation, resurrection and rebirth—a creative, joyful, luminous, physical experience of being disinterred from limitation.”

The best way I can think to nourish people in the endeavor of surprising themselves with poetic words, is not to say, “That’s awful” or “That isn’t working.” It is, instead, to hold up examples of surprising words and sounds, to train our eyes and ears for revelation. So this week I went in search of surprises. Often, they were parts of poems.

Now, if I wanted to say anything about growing as a writer, I would point to startling phrases and say do more of this, do more of that, and put the rest aside for another day, a different poem, or no poem at all. Keep only what surprises, and if nothing surprises, begin again.

From Laure’s To Serve You

let the damp earth
be the washing bowl
and the swollen grass
the cloth set before you.

From Monica’s Carpool and Cubicle

Inwardly we find
satisfaction at passing the lone commuters,
their brake lights red / no-red / red, morse-coding
another kind of S.O.S.: “I am alone.”

From Jim’s Détente

One more time
The perfunctory olive branch

It would be easier to breathe
While choking

From Ann’s Meeting Words

home through the dark, always counting
miles, counting hours,

From Yvette’s Freedom

Spread your wings and soar to the haze of the moon.
Pluck the stars from their golden hook

From Barbara’s The Dance of Pandora

the meadow, long
not from dream
awakened to lark and red

From Marcus’s Christ is Risen, But

And worms spin cocoons from doubt, not hope,
stitching themselves into darkness, disbelieving
(for joy) their uncertain metamorphosis

If you would like to participate in Random Acts of Poetry, read here for instructions. Also, if you would like to try a prompt for next week’s RAP, look at an ordinary object and find surprises in it. Describe the object with as many senses as you can conjure. If you like, begin, middle or end with the words, I look at [touch, hear, whatever] you, as if for the first time…

All RAP Participants:
Ann’s Meeting Words
Erica’s Random Acts of Poetry: Petals
LL’s daughters’Ballads, Grasses and Bliss
Brian’s The Anatomy of a Gift
Laure’s In Itself, To Serve You
Yvette’s Freedom
Monica’s Gratitude, Carpool and Cubicle
Barbara’s The Dance of Pandora
Jim’s Détente
Marcus’s Christ is Risen, But
nAncY’s Adoration
Cindy’s Spring Clean
Crystal’s Uneven Exchange
Laura’s Burden
Mike’s Cool
The Unknown Contributor’s Anyday
Lilac photo by nAncY. Used with permission. Post written by L.L. Barkat.

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deb May 1, 2009 at 9:59 am

It is so kind of you to teach and inspire.. perfect words for me today, thanks.

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Laure May 1, 2009 at 10:02 am

oh my. gifts.

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nAncY May 1, 2009 at 10:59 am

hi l.l. !!!

rap time…yea!

what a nice surprise to see the lilacs first thing as i opened the highcalling gift ! thank you so much!
:-)
so far… i have looked at ann’s “meeting words”

even before i read one word, i was hit with the layout.
my eyes were filled with the beautifuly balanced compositions of the images and then the letters with touches of blue.
then, to read the words which were pouredout on the page like honey on buttered toast.

what a treat.

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Barbara May 1, 2009 at 11:22 am

what a wonderful idea – thanks for including me —

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cindy May 1, 2009 at 11:29 am

as always, thank you.

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L.L. Barkat May 1, 2009 at 1:35 pm

Deb, thanks. Somehow I think the inspiration comes from us all being in the same room together, seeking to celebrate.

Laure, have fun unwrapping! : )

nAncY, I LOVED those lilacs. Many memories for me in that humble flower.

Barbara, why of course.

Cindy, welcome… as always.

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Megan Willome May 1, 2009 at 2:49 pm

A timely prompt, if ever there was one. Thanks to All for your surprising words.

RAP: Surprised by Words

RAP: Surprised by Words

My son’s English teacher
(who has never heard of Billy Collins)
introduced a poetry unit by screening Dead Poets Society.
Even so, she assigned a booklet full of formulas:
two gerunds + one appositive phrase = good poetry.
“Good poems rhyme,” announced my younger daughter.
“Like Dr. Seuss.” But the good doctor was not around,
nor was Mr. Collins nor Uncle Walt. Just me and
my 13-year-old son and Karen Hesse’s Out of the Dust.
We read aloud and I crossed my fingers,
hoping that poetry would grip him as surely as
that “sweaty-toothed madman” in the movie.
As he took up his pen, my son was surprised by words –
his own words that lined themselves up more neatly
than sums on notebook paper. Perhaps
Collins and Seuss, Whitman and Hesse
smiled at this young poet, knowing
his teacher will probably give him a “C.”

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laura May 1, 2009 at 2:55 pm

I actually tried my hand this time! Have been missing the poetry prompts, so will definitely be chewing on some words.

these offerings do bless.

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laura May 1, 2009 at 2:58 pm

Laure–

how i have missed you! I went over to uncommon ordinary to read your entire poem and wanted to tell you what loveliness you give.

:) Laura

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sojourner May 1, 2009 at 4:09 pm

i’m slowly working my way through this weeks offerings – i love Fridays because of RAP!

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Erica Hale May 1, 2009 at 8:50 pm

Oh, sweet poetry! Megan, I love your poem. I am so glad for teachers and mentors who understand that poetry is not arithmetic but a complex higher math…fractals and string theory and logarithms (logai-Rhythms) that flow and ebb and spin pictures rather than span ledgers. Red ink can’t touch the expression of a soul.

So glad for this today!

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Laure May 1, 2009 at 11:04 pm

laura,

thank you so much. i sure hope you’re enjoying these surprises as much as i am. friday is a good day … yes?!

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Megan Willome May 2, 2009 at 2:13 pm

Thank you, Erica. Your response was pure poetry!

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nAncY May 2, 2009 at 2:45 pm

eRicA

i love the word…. pEriWinkLe

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Erica Hale May 2, 2009 at 3:18 pm

*grin* periwinkle…azure….crimson…magenta…vermillion…I love color words, too. It’s even more fun when wRitteN creatively!

Meagan, thanks! I have a soft spot in my heart for students who are graded down for creativity. I remember filling the margins of a whole package of lined paper with doodles after school for a week, a teacher’s attempt to get me to stop drawing pictures on my papers. It didn’t break me of my drawing habit, but it did make me dislike fourth grade!

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nAncY May 2, 2009 at 4:31 pm

hors d’oeuvres
before the dinner of
warmth and blossoming
flowers,

oh, l.l. ! i love your daughter’s words…

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nAncY May 2, 2009 at 4:35 pm

brian..you are also…

The very physical
Tangible
Hug of Yahweh

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nAncY May 3, 2009 at 10:34 pm

slaying the monster in “spring cleaning”
was fantastic.

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Barbara Boothe Loyd May 29, 2009 at 9:37 am

Meagan, Your site is lovely. Paul and I can hardly comprehend Scott’s 13th year. Would love to read his poetry too. Know his assignment enlightened him re his mother’s hard work and skill.

We love Tulsa, but miss F’burg. May be down in July.

Our love to your family. P&B

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